Need help from the writer, poet people. Proofreading/Revisions

[Shibby]

Never Feel Alone

Even in the time I am not by your side
Rest assured the way I feel for you is always alive

Seeing you in everything, letting my heart control my mind
I close my eyes letting the feelings flow, still able to feel the warmth of your touch deep inside.

Living each minute away, hoping you feel the same
Waiting until I see you again to keep my hopes alive.

Let me show you what safety and comfort awaits,
being my everything to the world with your heart holding it's place next to mine.

The happiness and joy you bring is all I need
I can feel such strength while I still feel weak.

Give me the chance to make you everthing I know
Then I promise you, you will never feel alone.

[Auriflex]

rest assured


Otherwise don't change anything. Those are strong words. I would keep them all.

[Shibby]

^ Like that?

[JUICE]

Re: Need help from the writer, poet people. Proofreading/Revisions

Originally posted by Shibby
Never Feel Alone

Even in the time I am not by your side
Rest assured the way I feel for you is always alive

Seeing you in everything, letting my heart control my mind
I close my eyes letting the feelings flow, still able to feel the warmth of your touch deep inside.

Living each minute away, hoping you feel the same
Waiting until I see you again to keep my hopes alive.

Let me show you what safety and comfort awaits,
being my everything to the world with your heart holding it's place next to mine.

The happiness and joy you bring is all I need
I can feel such strength while I still feel weak.

Give me the chance to make you everthing I know
Then I promise you, you will never feel alone.

looks good brother, Im doin similar shit in school bro and the teacher saysIm good at it.

[Shibby]

Thanks guys. But I'm not doing it for school :inlove:

[Auriflex]

Nice Shibby. She'll like it.

[IntensityX]

That looks good bro Auriflex will like it very much :rofl: :rofl:

Eat,Learn,Train,Grow
IntensityX

[trip]

Ditto Mr. Auriflex,

No need to change anything that is right on the money.

At times great works of art flow out as easy as water from a faucet, when that happens, don't quesiton it and don't change a thing, it is one of the great moments in life, one to be cherised and felt and not debated.

Excellent Words Of Wisdom